Pronouns OMG

[lytwriter]

So I'm trying to write my first F/F story, and the pronouns are killing me. I'm not a fan of epithets, and strings of names are just clunky, but the constant string of the same pronouns in close scenes is driving me crazy.

I have an 11,500 word story I realized wasn't working in second person present, so yesterday was spent doing a quick conversion to third person present. "You" went to "she" and "her", and OMG the pronouns. It'll be worth the trouble once I fix the problems -- the language is much tighter and crisper, barring the pronoun problem, but OMG. She her her she her her who the hell is doing what?

How do the rest of you handle the pronoun issue in same sex relationship stories?

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[havocthecat]

There are...like two or three Elizabeth/Janet stories out there that neither of us wrote, and most of what we've written hasn't made it out of the drawerfic stage, tbh. But we love it!)

So can you tell me what you mean by tight second person POV because that's traditionally what I think of as a tight third person POV? But I am glad it helps!

The whole thing might take forever to get posted, to be fair, it's a-- Oh, God, it's not going to be almost anyone's cup of tea. But here's hoping my usual audience of "half a dozen niche readers who might enjoy that weird shit I write" will enjoy it!

[lytwriter]

LOL I meant third person. I haven't slept well in... years, literally, and this story I'm working on started in second person and I'm still finding oopsies where it's not third person. Five hours of sleep these days is heavenly and rare. So there's lots of typos and I type second person and third person interchangeably, LOL. OOPS. I do know the difference.

[havocthecat]

There could have been something I didn't know! I could have made a mistake! NBD. All good!